What Grade Would You Give Me for This Paper?
Question by ganicity: what grade would you give me for this paper?
the main focus was to integrate my internship experience with literature reviews of the treatment studies like group psychotherapy.
Abstract
I researched group psychotherapy treatment studies for substance abuse drug treatment program, which is related to my internship at Beth Israel Medical Center, because both are related to addiction studies. Beth Israel Medical Center assists addicted patients and their families on the road to recovery from substance use and to enhance their relapse prevention skills. An overview of a research study conducted on mothers who have substance abuse disorders is discussed in detail as well as the effects from treatment. Group psychotherapy is more effective that one on one drug counseling since it allows members to interact with one another and develop coping skills on how to handle their substance abuse disorders.
Another study displays the satisfaction from clients who sought out substance abuse group psychotherapy treatment. My internship consisted of dealing with substance abusers whose ages ranged from 18 and over seeking treatment for all kinds of drug use such as alcohol or heroin. I’ve observed a variety of groups such as women’s group, mixed gender groups, and also health groups all of which were very helpful to clients at the Beth Israel outpatient hospital setting program. Based on the literature reviews of effective group psychotherapy it can be concluded that group psychotherapy is valuable in assisting clients to become sober and have a network of supporting group members who can relate to their pressure of handling how to remain abstinence. There are many types of substance abuse treatments but one treatment that is increasingly showing effectiveness in the reduction for substance abuse disorders is group psychotherapy which consists of small groups which try to help those who are having difficulty with coping with their drug abuse and find ways to self-disclose themselves to others who are also having trouble with their drug abuse.
I chose to analyze research conducted that indicates and examine tendencies in group therapy in an outpatient substance abuse program. I feel that it is important for us to understand how group therapy helps group members open up to other group members about their with drug abuse difficulties they are coping with. During my internship, I frequently observed group sessions and sat in on numerous psychosocial evaluations. Despite this I was not fortunate enough to review dual disorders individual counseling sessions. Regardless of my exposure to this topic, I still realized and understand the importance of psychosocial evaluation and group sessions. This is an aspect of psychology and substance abuse that deeply intrigues me. It amazes me and gives me hope when I contemplate the advances psychologists have made in this evolving science.
Group therapy have shown to be an effective type of substance abuse treatment proven by research conducted, and it is my goal to have a deeper understanding of how effective and necessary it is in treating individuals who have a substance use disorder.
According to Waltman, the key to effective treatment for substance abuse includes easy access to care, flexible treatment interventions, collateral involvement, caring and knowledgeable therapists, motivated clients, matching treatment to the client’s needs, holding clients accountable for their sobriety, using focused interventions, and following up with drop-outs and graduates (Waltman, 1995). Treatment effectiveness depends on many variables such as the client’s characteristics, the severity of the substance-abuse disorder, he relative potency of the intervention, the duration of treatment, the content of sessions, the process/course of treatment, and the context where treatment occurs (Waltman, 1995). Providing clients with a selection of intervention alternative has been shown to decrease drop out and resistance, increase compliance and improve the overall effectiveness of the treatment program (Waltman, 1995). They felt the groups gave them the right amount of information, provoked them into thinking about their alcohol and drug use and provided them adequate opportunity to share their thoughts and feelings (Waltman, 1995).
Another study which conducted randomized controlled trial for women who were enrolled in recovery groups and The results from another study shown effectiveness in reducing substance use during a 12-week in-treatment phase, and the group treatment demonstrated significantly greater improvement in reductions in drug and alcohol use over the post-treatment follow-up phase compared with GDC (Greenfield, Trucco, McHugh, Lincoln & Gallop, 2007). The women’s group according to this study effectively showed a significant reduction of drinking (Greenfield, Trucco, McHugh, Lincoln & Gallop, 2007). According to Greenfield, Trucco, McHugh, Lincoln and Gallop, psychotherapy produces significantly better outcomes f
Best answer:
Answer by Taurean W
Your research paper starts with, which implies that it has a lot of, first person which is a no no.
Beth Israel Medical Center assists addicted patients and their families on the road to recovery from substance use – should say substance abuse. Substance use means any substance being used by anyone for example: a woman using cleaning supplies on her kitchen counter – so where you are using it to support your recovery wording it only confuses the audience.
Your first paragraph is written more as if it were intended for bullet format and not paragraph. You introduce too many ideas to have it in paragraph format. An abstract can be written in a bullet style but it should actually be in bullets. If your professor prefers paragraphs to bullets then it actually has to be paragraphs and not just bullets clumped together,
Group psychotherapy is more effective that one on one – should say “than” not that. Misusing such words tends to make me think that you didn’t read your own paper. You just hit the spellcheck and thought that good enough for a final product. The term “one on one” doesn’t belong in work written for such an audience as the one that you are addressing.
This is far too long for an abstract unless this is both the abstract and the beginning of your paper. Other than having the title abstract, I would not know that it were intended to be an abstract, It just looks like a regular paper.
Another study displays the satisfaction from clients who sought out substance abuse group – your second paragraph starts this way. “another” implies that you haven’t finished your thought from the first paragraph so why have you started a second. I don’t think that “displays” is the word you want to use here. It can generally be used interchangeably with the word you intended but this is not a generalized paper. Display means to make available for sterile viewing. You can’t display customer satisfaction other than getting quotes from all of them and compiling a list and no “study” would find such information useful. A study “shows.”
I’ve lost interest in reading further what you have to say because the first paragraph tells me that you don’t know what an abstract is, you don’t read your own work, and you don’t know how to make a paragraph to begin with so what warrants your receiving face time from an audience interested in such a topic as phychotherapy.
I am sorry for what I’ve had to say thusfar but I really hope that you find it useful.
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